USA TODAY - Sept. 23

September 23, 2014

            The photo of Gabby Giffords and her husband is very powerful and the lead to the story is moving as well and its placement on the page is appropriate.  I did delete “on” in front of the date in the caption of the photo, due to AP style rules, but I am beginning to think it may be a stylistic choice the publication is making since it has occurred so many times.

            The India Prime Minister story on page 2, had a widow in the top right corner of the story. In the “Kurds say Turkey not doing enough to stop Islamic State” I deleted the word “here” from the sentence, “He, like many in this crowd of thousands here, is itching for a fight.” It is unnecessary and awkward. Also, the photo captions in tiny columns are difficult to read. They would do better to make room under the photos always instead of putting the caption into a column.

            The Gabby Giffords story continues on page 6, and it begins with a widow, which would be best avoided. I deleted “on” before the date in two of the captions. I also questioned the use of “reassuring” in the caption with her mother, how did they know it was reassuring? In the briefs, there is also a widow in the last column.